It's been six months since the erasure plundered the citizens of their memories. Few lost some, many lost all. Faced with impossible odds, Twilight Sparkle must decide if it's worth fighting for something she can't remember.
You're no Steve Climber, but Steve Climber is.
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I'm loving the vibe of this story! Keep up the good work, my brony!!
Brohoof, choom
Nice.
Also, is this 'good pony cyberpunk,' or 'really, really good pony cyberpunk?' Still deciding.
Sorry I'm not more articulate right now. Maybe when I have more free time.
My only complaint is that this story is too short, otherwise everything is amazing. The setting is bleak, interesting, and begs to be explored, Twilight's plight makes me want to see how it ends. But for what it is, it's a solid short story, keep it up!
What a line!!! There's a lot of great worldbuilding beneath the surface. This is the kind of multi-layered story I really enjoy returning to. It's got an engaging plot with a ton of meat beneath. Great job!
FUCKING PREEM
HOW ARE YOU ONE OF THE BEST WRITERS I'VE EVER MET WAIT I KNOW THE ANSWER TO THAT IT'S BECAUSE YOU'RE FUCKING AWESOME
CONCEPT ON POINT, PROSE IS CREME OF THE FUCKING CROP, STRUCTURE UNDEFEATABLE
SUCH AN INSANE FIRST SENTENCE AND YOU DO THE STREAM OF CONSCIOUSNESS SO INCREDIBLY WELL
LOVE YA POOKIE GOOD LUCK WITH THE CONTEST
Hey there, Papers!
Well, building off my private comments earlier, here's my public review!
What I like about this is how well it capitalizes on the concept introduced more in the description but is otherwise kept in the background. The story is strange and abstract, but the prose hits those good notes and creates some powerful emotions, particularly the sense of loss (and being lost). Folks are really digging the "cyberpunk" vibe, and I agree with them.
I'd say you've got a real gem here, Papers!
This is pure cyberpunk, chummer. Excellent minimalist worldbuilding, strikes the perfect tone of high tech, low life. I know you wrote this in a rush and would love to see a longer version, but what's there is great.
It's been a while since I've read cyberpunk, but this is a good one! As a few other commenters have noted, I thought you did a great job with the minimalistic worldbuilding -- we don't know exactly what the erasure was or how it happened or what all the broader implications of it are or will be, but we know enough to wonder, and to understand Twilight's struggles, and that's enough. :)
And even though this works well as a one-shot imo, there's so much else going on in this world -- not the least of which being whether Twilight manages to find the rest of her friends, and what states they ended up in. And what they're even like, because while one was quite clearly Pinkie, the others are just different enough that I can only speculate -- that I'd happily read far more if you ever chose to continue it!